file Submission: Financial Auditor

09 Oct 2017 21:46 #83785 by jblacey
Financial Auditor
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3 :pool:
Mortal with 1 life. 0 strength, 1 bleed.
Requires a Giovanni or a Camarilla vampire. Your master phase actions to remove a counter from investment cards are a trifle. As a +1 stealth (D) action look at a Methuselah's hand and you may discard a card that can increase a bleed or changes the target of a bleed.
Fraud is not an acceptable accounting practice. -C. R. Vance, Jr.

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10 Oct 2017 04:36 #83790 by ScoundrelAtHeart

Financial Auditor
:ally:
3 :pool:
Mortal with 1 life. 0 strength, 1 bleed.
Requires a Giovanni or a Camarilla vampire. Your master phase actions to remove a counter from investment cards are a trifle. As a +1 stealth (D) action look at a Methuselah's hand and you may discard a card that can increase a bleed or changes the target of a bleed.
Fraud is not an acceptable accounting practice. -C. R. Vance, Jr.


Is "look at a methuselah's hand" clear enough to indicate that you can choose any one of the the players at the table? Maybe "any" would be more more clear? I don't know. Compare with cards that have "bleed with +1 bleed as a D-action" and cards with "bleed any methuselah with +1 bleed as a D-action" to get an Idea what I mean.

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10 Oct 2017 05:33 #83792 by Kraus
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You could use the same template as Le Din Tho. That has always been clear enough.

I'm enjoying this.

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11 Oct 2017 03:13 #83818 by jblacey
Financial Auditor
:ally:
3 :pool:
Mortal with 1 life. 0 strength, 1 bleed.
Requires a Giovanni or a Camarilla vampire. Your master phase actions to remove a counter from investment cards are a trifle. Auditor may look at another Methuselah's hand and discard one card that can increase a bleed or change the target of a bleed (if any) as a +1 stealth (D) action (that Methuselah draws back up to his or her hand size).
Fraud is not an acceptable accounting practice. -C. R. Vance, Jr.

Quite a bit of text, but worse case scenario the flavor text could be cut.
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11 Oct 2017 06:21 #83819 by Kraus
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Well, in a pinch I think we'd remove the remainder clause of redraw first, as that's already covered in the rules.

Financial Auditor
:ally:
3 :pool:
Mortal with 1 life. 0 strength, 1 bleed.
Requires a Giovanni or a Camarilla vampire. Your master phase actions to remove a counter from investment cards are a trifle. Auditor may look at another Methuselah's hand and discard one minion card that can increase a bleed or change the target of a bleed (if any) as a +1 stealth (D) action (that Methuselah draws back up to his or her hand size).
Fraud is not an acceptable accounting practice. -C. R. Vance, Jr.

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Financial Auditor
:ally:
3 :pool:
Mortal with 1 life. 0 strength, 1 bleed.
Requires a Giovanni or a Camarilla vampire. Your master phase actions to remove a counter from investment cards are trifle. Auditor may look at another Methuselah's hand and discard one minion card that can increase a bleed or change the target of a bleed (if any) as a +1 stealth (D) action.
Fraud is not an acceptable accounting practice. -C. R. Vance, Jr.

--unless of course you intended her to be able to discard master cards as well, such as Club Illusion and Legendary Vampire. I'm not sure if that was the plan? With locations it could be cool, but then again he's no real estate agent or solicitor (or what do I know), and THEN it could get wordy. Just add a minion for clarity?

It's be a bit leaner if the text said 'discard A card' instead of 'ONE card', but I can see how some people might find anxiety in that.

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11 Oct 2017 12:42 #83823 by ScoundrelAtHeart
Making an opponent discard a Master card sounds powerful.

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